Eleanor Rigby

Thanks guys! I appreciate all the nit-pickyness. I try and clean it up. Keep the crits coming!

I'll print this out and get back to you.

Thanks everyone! Is there anything else that I should change?

If you're an indie music freak like me, this site is AMAZING. Absolutely AMAZING.

Thanks for the crit, Sohini!

Misty - I'm glad that you thought the beginning had a great hook; before I handed it in for writer's craft I had something different at the beginning and something ...

Thanks! We write most poignantly about what we know, it seems.

Haha you're funny . . . nope, haven't written any books . . . far too impatient. So yup, I'm just an ordinary girl that's into the Beetles, but don't ...

I changed the negation, but 'weather' is meant to be like that . . . maybe I'll have to change it to another word. Thanks! :wink:

Well, I'm certainly glad that you didn't think it was another dialogue-less attempting to be deep piece of crap. lol. You made my day by me making your day! :wink: ...

Yeah, that's the stupidity of it. Foxes are fast, meaning that life is fast, although, when you think about it, what is longer than life? Get it? Slowly, like a ...

Aw, you guys are too nice! It's so great to see that people actually like this because originally, it was never meant to be read. It was just sort of ...

Thanks for the comments! I actually wrote this the day after that amazing teacher I talked about left (yes he is real), and I just wrote and wrote and wrote. ...

OOooOoo, I like that tea idea, I think I'll use it! Thanks for the advice :wink:

Yeah, you're completely right. It's from Greek mythology and the river styx is where dead souls go to spend etenity. That was the point of the title; it was supposed ...